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I lost my voice
the day you died.

I sealed it up in a jar,
just freshly plucked from
my cherry red lips;
it sits forgotten in
the dust, right next
to the skeletons
in my closet.

I can still feel
your fingers clutching
at my adam’s apple,
playing the delicate strings
of my larynx
like a broken harp.

you were the words
that left my
mouth as pretty
poetry and
complex metaphors,
but the ink no
longer flows through
these calloused bones.

I can’t help it as my
fingers dance  
over the stitches
that line my throat,
single file x’s that remind
me of the day
I forgot how to breathe—
at least you can’t hear
me cry anymore.
the scars still haunt me.

Title Challenge #1
Inspired by lost my voice. by littleblueraccoon.

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capricecake Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Student Writer
*snaps*

i feel ya. c;
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SleepingInTheShadows Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! (:
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Student Writer
OMGOMGOMG
THIS WAS INSPIRED BY SOMETHNG OF MINE? ME?
WHAT?
how did you write something this awesome from my lame lil poem? Lol
whew okay but this is amazing! This poem is so crisp, bold, sharp, to-the-point, and poignant. I especially love the image of stitches along the throat...so macabre and cool!

Wow, such a good poem! :heart:
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SleepingInTheShadows Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes of course. It's not that surprising. You poetry is always inspiring to me. (:

See that's what I love about this approach. I saw the title, got inspired and started writing. Came back and read your poem to find it to be so simple and sweet. It's amazing how two totally different piece came from the same words. 

Your words make me blush though. :blushes: They really do mean a lot. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :heart:
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Student Writer
Awww, things like that really make me feel good! :huggle:

Yeah, the two poems were really different, too! It just goes to show how different people can view different words and phrases. So cool! 

You're welcome, you deserve it. :la:
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wdnest Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Professional Writer
Yes wonderful amazing work.
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SleepingInTheShadows Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! also, thank you for the submission to your group's featured gallery. it's greatly appreciated. 
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wdnest Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Professional Writer
No worries 

Defeat the Darkness by wdnest  
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Student General Artist
This is magnificent, <3
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SleepingInTheShadows Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! (:
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